Star Wars

[Arkflip]

QUOTE (kernie82 @ Jul 5 2010, 08:16 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

Definite improvements!

Sorry to keep giving you so many notes. I hope I'm not becoming a pest and that you are viewing this cover as a worthwhile learning experience...

What he said

Also pay attention to the synopsis 'cause right now it's too close to Yoda's head.

[Paris]

update
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[Kernie]

Not bad... but I was thinking something like this...

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I also bumped the critic quote down about 5-10 pixels to balance the empty space above with the empty space below.

Otherwise, I have very little else to say... nice job!!

[rein2007]

I don't like the screen bar at all, it doesn't suite the layout in my opinion. Maybe use 2 loose screencaps instead. I like the clean layout a lot besides this.

[M0vieM0nster]

I like the idea so far, although i prefer Kernie82's suggestion but both ways its seems like not much is happening in the pic bar! Possibly try to give it more of an explosion of pics and action?

[Paris]

I think I'm going to go with the loose pics because I'm not really feeling the row that much

[Paris]

Finished??
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[Kernie]

Critic quote looks GREAT!! Nice subtle tweaks!!

Unfortunately, I think the Special Features list and still pics need some work. The stills just seem slapped in there with very little regard for how they are interacting with the space around them.

First off, how about underlining the "Special Features" heading (or double-underling might look classier)?

The Special Features text is also leaving a lot of dead space. I realize those are the only special features on the DVD, but how about padding out the text a bit more? For instance, have the Audio Commentary include each person's title (this will help to flesh things out), like so: "AUDIO COMMENTARY featuring Producer George Lucas, Director Irvin Kershner, Sound Designer Ben Burtt, Screenwriter Lawrence Kasdan, Visual Effects Director Dennis Muren, and Actress Carrie Fisher." It's a small change, but it might help.

You could also add some text to the Features on Disc 2 by adding another sentence or two describing the feature. Like "Original 1980 version of The Empire Strikes Back. Includes the original visual effects and soundtrack as experienced by audiences upon the film's initial theatrical release."

And lastly, can you increase the line spacing on the synopsis text so that it fills in the gap a bit better between the last line of the synopsis and the "Special Features" heading. Also, uncheck the "Hyphenate" box in the Paragraph window to avoid awkward word breaks like "impris - oned" in your synopsis.

I'm sure you're sick of my 2 cents by now, but I really think you've come a long way (like miles and miles) since your original post. I hope you are happy with it!!

[Nightrider]

The advice and support of guys like Arkflip and kernie is priceless, nikerun you've done a lot good work here and should be proud, I think if you follow the last advice given here by kernie it'll really cap it off. And just on a personal note I think it looks even better with the picture bar than the individual stills, of course thats your call, though maybe try moving the one of Luke across the back more away from Yoda and bringing the Falcon cockpit one up and nearer to Yoda, so they are kind of stepped and then moving your quotes, synopsis and SF text down a bit, might make it look a bit more balanced.
Top job none the less

[Arkflip]

QUOTE (kernie82 @ Jul 5 2010, 11:55 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>

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This is imo the best solution for the screens. I really don't like to see those two caps like that, you're missing something...

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Thanks for listening us and decided to go with Trajan for the quote, but you need to adjust the leading between the lines so they can be closer each others.

I still think the synopsis is too close of yoda's head.

And i second again what Kernie said about the rest.

Be proud of this cover dude, it's your best imo!