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Looking great so far, V :)

Only thing that cathes my eye is '13 Sensational...' - too wide spread out. You should lessen the kerning some, and make sure the text isn't too large for the box.
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The box had moved a little - moved it back. I thought the spacing was ok, maybe it looked weird because it looking squished inside the box/blue panel?

Added some more characters and darkened the text, tweaked some other areas.

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Still think you should decrease the kerning a bit. But that's just me :)
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I'll give it a try buddy thanks :)
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very nice bud !!! Maybe reduce a little bit the opacity of the bird shadow :)
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Will do m8
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Some more done. '13 sensational' text more compressed also lighter bird shadow. Added Geri, stills and smaller aliens.

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Nice job my friend ! :) Just two suggestion maybe make the sky a little bit more darker cause now it's too bright IMO, the other is i'm not sure about the position of your stills pictures...
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I think you have room for an exta still?

Nicely done!
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Thanks guys, repositioned the text at the top and added high def text, will drop the stills a little, i don't think i'm done yet :)

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