Matrix Trilogy

[ctaulbee]

You could add the real actor names or last names after the character names that would increase the line at the bottom on the first section, I'm not sure the third one matters as you have that area filled with light effects anyway...

...we join Neo Keanu Reeves , Trinity Carrie-Anne Moss and Morpheus Laurence Fishburne leading...

or

...we join Neo Reeves , Trinity Moss and Morpheus Fishburne leading...

Whichever works best.

[Fidi]

Best would work if I use it like this: K.Reeves.
But I'm not sure about Moss, is it C.-A. Moss then?

[ctaulbee]

Would not want to hyphenate the initials like that, just use C. Moss

[alienmem]

Space the letters out the in paragraph box so each line is filled. that should work.


Great cover but don't you think it's too dark? Maybe bring in some more green, since the whole movie is slightly green tinted.

[WeakySneasel]

QUOTE Also, (and this is being really anal, you can thank Kernie for teaching me) can you arrange the synopsis a bit better, so it doesn't have so much negative space at the end of the first and last paragraphs?[/quote] Re - Bazzah's "anal" request. Personally, I don't see the 'Revolutions' space as empty, for me it is visually filled with the lightening but you could perhaps tweak the flash to fill the space even further.

As for the 'Matrix' paragraph:
a) this complex sentence is grammatically incoherent anyway, so could really do with a re-write. Personally, I'd simply remove "...to control us" and just end with "...artificial intelligence." This will 'solve' the issue.
b) if you don't like this and go for actor names, PLEASE DON'T go for initials - bad idea!
c) for what it's worth, I'm not sure I agree with Bazzah on this one anyway. For me, it would be better to have all three paragraphs end short, rather than all end flush - It's more of a style choice (Anyway, I think he's been hugely overdoing it on Pizza and blaming it on hacking - and he's even persuaded the bank to refund him!!!)

[sauron]

You've done a great job on the layout with that amount of text! I don't mind the synopsis how it is at the moment, if it were one word on it's own then definitely would suggest what Baz says, widows are a big no for good typography

[Fidi]

Since we're only talking about the texts and not about any images I don't see any problems at all.
English isn't myfirst language so sorry for any grammatical mistakes - but I guess to find them is another reason for a WIP.

So I've changed the synopsis a bit. I'm not a fan of spacing out letters as well, that often simply isn't looking very good. So I've added the four actor's names (also Hugo Weaving at the end of Revolutions) and did not have to go with initials because deleting what WeakySneasel said was very helpful.

Just as Morpheus I've centered the lighting ball as well.

Thanks a lot for your comments! Any more suggestions for the back?

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[sauron]

Nope looks good to me, how does the whole cover look together?

[bazzah]

I think it looks amazing! Great job with the synopsis too

[ctaulbee]

Really outstanding job on this Christian