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Post by clark_ckcstm »

the other backgroud looks better. the image is great but the background is to bright / purple.
also you had some pattern behind the synopsis on the last one that I think miss now
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Ok i'm switching back, if it isn't broken dont fix it right?
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I like the new one, but didn't dislike the old one. The new one is a bit too purple in places.

The quote/tagline needs to be bigger and bolder. Your synopsis could use some cleaning up as well. Condense the letter spacing on the last four/five lines the paragraph so the words aren't so spread out and so that James Franco's name is moved up to the line above (avoid widows/orphans in your paragraph text).

The Special Features list seems a bit small for all three films. That whole area needs a lot of work, in my opinion. It's too little text for such a big area. Find a way to organize the list better...

And I still don't care for how pronounced the suit pic is behind the legals (but it doesn't look like you've concentrated on that with this latest update, so I'm assuming you're getting to it).
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Post by gbk33 »

Superb work here! IMHO - I would say ditch the Sandman pic in favor of Venom or the Green Goblin. Both are better villians. Again, this is excellant work!
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Cheers for the comments guys. Here's an update, put in a goblin pic with a goblin bomb. Lowered the opacity and removed the gradient map from the spidey suit at the bottom, and did a little work to Tobey's Hair, thought not enough i'm sure... I hate hair its a b!tch to extract :(
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Post by Kernie »

Looks better with the Goblin pic, the more subtle suit image, and the fixed synopsis! :thumb:

Check your synopsis for spelling errors. "Toby maguire" should be "Tobey Maguire" and "Alfred Milano" should be "Alfred Molina," he is not related to the chick from "Who's the Boss" and "Charmed."

I would also recommend working on the tagline (which I don't think should be surrounded in quotes, and it should fill in that big space better) and the Special Features list now. The black Special Features text gets lost in the background. You might want to put some kind of background behind the Special Features, like a 50% opacity color/pattern/gradient block. Or just find a better way to arrange that text. It's really not working at the moment, sorry. :(
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Ok thanks kernie, hadn't looked at the synopsis, jwshaw pointed that out as well. Already corrected. Trying to fix the tag and the synopsis. Might just do a subtle change to make the text stand out a bit more.
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I personally think the tagline and Special Features might need more than a subtle change, but you're the designer... :shrug:
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Post by venome »

Maybe something like this LCD

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Post by LittleCoolDude »

seriously awesome.... I think thats something I can pull off :D
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