X-Men Origins: Wolverine

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Is this better?
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Just a slight update.

I'm still not happy with the synopsis and the special features. Anyone got any ideas for it?
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Here is a matching label I knocked up quickly.
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I like the still bar ;)
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That looks great.
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Post by sauron »

Thanks - Here is an update on the label.

Anyone got any idea of how i can make the synopsis and sf look better?
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For the synopsis, why not make some of the character names bold? Condense the kerning/letter-spacing to avoid having the last line "Saga)" on it's own line, get that little guy up there on the line above it (no widows and orphans!). And maybe make the first letter of the whole paragraph (the "S" in "Superstar") really big, like an initial cap or a drop cap?

As for the SF list, you need to take care of that big blob of empty space to the right of the last 5-7 bullet points. Maybe you can put a few of them on the same line and separate them with bullets? Like so...
"• Ultimate X-Mode • X-Connect • The Director's Chair • Pre-Visualizing Wolverine"

Also, be mindful of your orphans. Get the "Characters)" line up there with it's buddies in the line above! A general typography rule is that the last line of a paragraph should be at least 60-75% of the width of the entire paragraph. One or a few words left dangling on their own line should be bumped up to the line above by subtly adjusting the letter-spacing or deleting unnecessary words from the paragraph.

I really think all of your problems would be solved by adding a critic quote or some sort of text above the synopsis. Then you won't have as much space that needs to be filled by the SF list and you can easily bump some of those bullets together on the same line.

See my rough comp below for a visual of what I've rambled about above...

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One last thing, add the words "Feature Length Audio" in front of the "Commentary by Director Gavin Hood" to help fill in some of the empty space to the right of that line of text.

There's my 2 cents... do with it what you will... :D :D :D
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Oh, and on your label, use the 20th Century Fox logo, not the Fox Searchlight one...
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Post by sauron »

You are the man Kernie! Thanks so much for all the help! Now to find a quote and sort all these adjustments!
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- Update :) Think this looks better now.
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